In many countries smoking is now illegal in public places. Do you agree or disagree?

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At present, in many countries have imposed about banning of smoking in public areas because

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activity can

lead people have

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lead people to have

health

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problems.

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, I firmly agree with

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statement and will discuss my view in

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essay. Smoking is seen as

harmful triggered factor

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a harmful triggered factor

harmful triggered factors

that can harm

human's

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human

health

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as Chronic obstructive pulmonary disease (COPD), Asthma, Bronchitis and so on. Which is related to other organ diseases like heart and vascular diseases.

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, governments should approach measures to solve

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issue about forbidding smokers to smoke in crowded places,

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as restaurants, parks, bus stations as

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can disturb other people.

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, in Thailand, the

health

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authority campaigns and give education for Thai citizens to understand and realise about a number of drawbacks of smoking.

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, smoking areas should be provided for these groups in order to not to annoy some individual who not smoke.

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, there

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some research from

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the Lung cancer institution

Lung cancer institutions

reported that a person who is

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hand

smoker

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smoke

has more risk to be sick from lung cancer more than a person who smokes approximately 7% in total of nationwide.

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, my patient died from lung cancer and metastatic breast without

history

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a history

of smoking but her husband who did smoke still alive.

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, it can disturb some people who do not like its smell and may exacerbate of asthma or some respiratory distress syndrome caused of fatality. To sum up, there is no any advantage of smoking

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only disadvantages as it can lead to

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diseases, which is not only a smoker but

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impacted on their family or friends who are surrounding them. I still strongly agree

with banning of

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with banning

smoking in sharing places.

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