Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, using a
computer
by children is a very commonly discussed topic worldwide. Some people claim that with the advanced technology, there is no way to educate kids without
computer
Suggestion
computers
a computer
.
That is
part of children's development.
However
, in the same time there are some negative points to contemplate that cannot be ignored.
For example
, using computers for games, social media and prohibited content. Some of which
this
essay shall consider. The
first
point to contemplate is regarding the fact that
computer
Suggestion
the computer
is part of our life. Children should be introduced as early as they can on it. In the near future, all schools have to will be using
computer
Suggestion
computers
the computer
a computer
as part of the method of apprentice.
Furthermore
,
computer
skills are necessary to the acknowledgement's development of children and all the school’s assessments are found on the internet.
On the other hand
, there are some objections that cannot be ignored. Young people should always be supervised by
adult
Suggestion
an adult
adults
when using
computer
Suggestion
the computer
a computer
computers
. The internet is a vast field of information, there is some good information on that,
however
is very easy to find as violence and
adult
content.
Moreover
, I do not recommend the use of social media for people with less than 13 years old. Social media is a door for bad intention's people to get closer to the kids, and we have to preserve them as much as we can.
Finally
, considering the point discussed previously, it is clear to state that
computer
Suggestion
the computer
a computer
is necessary for the kid's development, but at the same time should be always supervised and monitored by
adult
Suggestion
adults
an adult
. As
adult
Suggestion
adults
an adult
, we have to show how to use it consciously and alert about the dangers that can bring over.
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