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Many people think that important things in life are mostly free or can’t be bought. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience.

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Majority
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The majority
 of people believe that
money
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are
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is
 much more important because it can make
life
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 more easily. I totally disagree with
this
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 point of view, there are much more things are important in
life
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 which
money
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 can’t
bought
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buy
. On the one hand, some people say that
money
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 can
satisfied
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satisfy
 our dissertation and there will be more opportunities can be achieved in
life
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. It is true that thing will become
easily
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easy
 if we have more
money
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. We can afford large house, raise our
families’
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family
 member and pay the bills.
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, students can complete their
education
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education, then
then
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 become a useful person if they don’t have to worried about their tuition fee.
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, Families and friends are our sprites of support and they are
source
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sources
 of happiness. There are no any substance of things can’t be valued them. I believe that
majority
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the majority
 of people
feels
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feel
 that families and friends is the main
reson
a rational motive for a belief or action
reason
reasons
 to make us feel being a human In conclusion,
although
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 there are some of
benefits
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the benefits
 have present that
money
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 can achieve more opportunities in
life
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, I believe that families and friends are more important and can’t be replace to compare with
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money
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the money
.
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