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Some people feel that it is always wrong to keep animals in captivity, for instance in zoos. Other people say that there are benefits for the animals and for humans. Discuss both sides of this debate, and give your personal view.

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Many individuals convinced that animals must not be kept in captivity,
such
 as zoos and circuses. While others claim the opposite opinion that there are pros for the fauna representatives as well as for people. There are strong arguments on both camps, which I will consider before the personal attitude is given. From one point of view, animals must live in freedom and must not be put in cages by humans, because they, especially wild ones, suffer from
unnatural conditions
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the unnatural conditions
 out of their natural habitats. It is worth mentioning that even 20 square meters cages in zoos are too small for bears,
wolfs
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wolves
, and lions who were born to live in huge mountainous forests and immense savannas, and swimming pools for dolphins are too tight to pretend like it is an ocean. According to the researches,
this
 tightness and pressure of the captivity
affects
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affect
 the longevity of life of
animals making
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animals, making
 it two times shorter than if they were free.
Besides
, our little friends often exhausted from the trainings in circuses, which usually contain violent actions, from camera lights and from frequent rides by car, these obstacles are all unnatural for them. From another perspective, many people believe that there are a lot of advantages for society and for the animals from the
animals
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animal
 entertainment industry. It is important to note that zoos play a tremendous role in educating young generations about flora and fauna. Many kids inspired to see real tigers and wild birds after learning about them from books.
This
impressions
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impression
 after meeting the animals in person can positively impact the future study and career of the children. Some of them would become aspiring biologists, veterinarians or nature photographers.
Moreover
, zoos and circuses are the whole industry nowadays, and many people employed there, which makes the keeping animals in these facilities beneficial for society. Overall, there are merits to both sides in regard to whether animals should be kept in captivity or live freely in their habitats. I personally think that animals have to live in a freedom, and zoos are no longer acceptable in modern world.
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