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When so many people are starving to death in different parts of the world, do you think it is justifiable for any government to spend money on Space Exploration Projects? Give your views.

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Undoubtedly, the
indiviuals
a human being
individuals
 are dying from lack of food in various parts of
world
Suggestion
the world
. The regulatory bodies expending funds on Space Exploration
plrojects
.
Accept space
.
 I believe that
authorties
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the authorities
authorities
 should incur money to feed people rather than spending on other projects.
To begin
 with, Focus of government should be on feed humans
first
. In the USA spending money on so many
projects but
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projects, but
 there are a lot of
peopel
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 who have not two time meal in a day.
Besides
this
, Many of people
has
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have
 no education. So, government should keep
this
 issue on their priorities. As they can feed their families. As according to research,
apporximatly
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
approximately
 39 %
is umemployed which
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are unemployed, which
is unemployed which
are unemployed which
are umemployed which
 increase the rapid rate of death. The
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 is
backbone
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the backbone
 of
country
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the country
a country
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, they should
chanalize
direct the course; determine the direction of travelling
channelize
canalize
channelise
 their
priorties
status established in order of importance or urgency
priorities
properties
protest
. To conclude, Government should address the
press
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pressing
 issue. They should feed the people as wasting
mony
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
 on other space exploration projects which is no way will help people to fight
hungar
a physiological need for food; the consequence of food deprivation
hunger
Hungary
.
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