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Most people could not go to work in quarantine period and stayed at home due to the Covid-19 pandemic. What problems lockdown may arise, and how can these problems be tackled.

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In order to vindicate population from unstoppable pandemic all government declared quarantine period, when no one is able to go anywhere. Sedentary lifestyle around the globe may bring health related issues and global economic
atrophy which
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atrophy, which
 can be solved by uniting forces of us, I guess. Sitting in isolation without any physical actions is taken into account as
primary reason
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the primary reason
a primary reason
 for obesity since a certain amount of calories gained through consuming
are
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is
 unable to be smashed, I believe.
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On
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 turn, most devices and qualities of lifestyle are based and designed for indoor life,
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 as game pads and internet service providers. In order to find
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a proper solution
 to protect ordinary people, social media and other people who are staunch to sport should be busy with urging them to do daily exercises. What’s more, current economic system cannot be run without
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the contribution
 of middle and small entrepreneurship.
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, the long-lasting quarantine procedure might be detrimental and bring numerous problems that are unable to be tackled. Taking recent report by
World Economy Organization
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the World Economy Organization
 in May 2020, it can be witnessed that namely proportion of world trade circulation exacerbated as if irreversibly. If the cyber-
labors
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labours
 and robotic based factories are allowed to be activated, they might supply daily demands,
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 panacea is under the meticulous investigation of numerous governors owing to public demand for the connotation. By way of conclusion, inactivity of today’s day and age people
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will, presumably
,
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 can be escaped easily by basic physical activities like push-down. The technologies are invincible to any of the noxious viruses,
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 robotic maids should be legalized even in quarantine, I think.
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