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Some people believe that there is a reduction in air travel in the future. Do you think that this trend as positive or negative development?

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There is belief that air flight will be reduced in the future
.
Accept space
.
As a result
,
Accept space
,
 the number of tourists will drop due to it. The question whether
this
 trend will impact positively or negatively is not an easy issue to be answered.
This
 essay will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 these developments.
First
 of all
,
Accept space
,
 it is predicted that the number of flights will dramatically decrease in the future.
This
 trend will positively affect both on our environment. Due to
this
 situation, the number of tourists visiting the historical places will
significantly fall
Suggestion
fall significantly
.
This
 in its turn will help to improve
ecological condition
Suggestion
the ecological condition
 of the country.
Secondly
,
exausted
drained of energy or effectiveness; extremely tired; completely exhausted
exhausted
 gases and other chemicals produced by different means of transports will be less. On the other side, every country's economy relies on international
tourizm
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
. The
budjet
a sum of money allocated for a particular purpose
budget
budgets
 of the country highly affects on
this
 infrastructure.
Whatsmore
 for some countries the only income is tourism industry.
Thus
,
Accept space
,
such
 reduction is
highyl
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
highly
 impossible and not recommended. To conclude, I
pend
form a curve
bend
 down saying that there are both positive and negative effects of
such
 reduction.
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