Zoos are sometimes seen as necessary but poor alternatives to a natural environment. Discuss some of the arguments for and against keeping animals in zoos.

Zoological gardens are sometimes seen as an
obligatary
morally or legally constraining or binding
obligatory
but
poor alternatives
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a poor alternative
poor alternative
to a natural environment.Some people are of the view that zoos are must while some contradict and revolt against keeping animals in
zoo
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zoos
the zoo
a zoo
.I strongly agree with the fact and I'm
further
discussing both sides of the matter in the passage below. Animals are an important part of the nature and it is our responsibility to preserve them. Zoos are a major
source
of conservation
for
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of
the animals that are
at
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on
the verge of extinction. They help preserve the depleting species of animals.
Secondly
, zoos provide full care and attention to the animals. They
are served
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serve
food, cleaned and provided with all other basic
ammenities
things that make you comfortable and at ease
amenities
.
Thirdly
, they serve as a
source
of entertainment for the human beings. It is
vey
used as an intensifier
very
fascinating seen animals like lions and bears from
such
a short distance. Not only they serve as a
source
of
entertainment but
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entertainment, but
also
they provide knowledge to children who are completely anonymous to
wide range
Suggestion
a wide range
of animals.
This
provokes them to learn more about the animal kingdom. Most importantly, they are saved from the cruel activities of mankind like poaching and hunting.
However
, one can never side eye the disadvantages of zoos. The animals are imprisoned throughout their lives.Their right of moving freely is taken away.Animals like elephants and monkeys live in groups so they should be set free.
Secondly
, animals completely forget about their instincts as they are not able to hunt and may even die from
this
.They may become lethargic and are completely dependent on people. In conclusion, Zoos are a must as they preserve the animal kingdom and prevent them from extinction.
Also they
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Also, they
are a
source
of knowledge. But
animals
Suggestion
the animals
who live in groups and herds should be left in the natural environment.
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