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Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Developed nations must give employment to people who have talent and knowledge but belongs to a poor
nation
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. I do not totally agree with
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 idea as the person's ability will get used in another
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 which is already stable
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 of his own
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.
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, he would get a better standard of living in a developed
nation
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. If a well-educated person goes abroad to work, it would be disadvantageous for his own
country
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. A
country
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 provides students with its resources to make them well trained so that they can serve their own
country
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 and when it is the time to give back to the society if we go and get settled in another territory it would be unfair. In a long term,
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 migration would make poor
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 poorer and richer
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 richer. Nowadays, many teenagers are migrating to more developed countries like US or Canada from India. To stop
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 flow of people Indian government has launched many schemes to give better opportunities to youth. But, at the individual level working in well-developed
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 gives better prospects for one's career. There are so many youngsters who wish to work abroad where there is better living standard and
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 they can earn more. Their high income helps them to support their families more easily. A developed
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 provides with better working environment and prospects to the employer giving them work satisfaction. To summarize, working abroad is very benefitting at the individual level while it is harmful at the
country
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 level.
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, it depends on our priorities, whether we want to develop our career or help whole
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 to develop.
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