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Some people with a good education and experience in their field decide to move abroad to work. Why do you think that is? What are the problems caused by this?

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More and more highly qualified and experienced people migrate to foreign countries in search for
job
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jobs
a job
.
This
 is because of
availability
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the availability
 of better quality of life and
this
 leads to decrease in the economic growth of their own country. When compared to developing countries
,
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,
 developed nations provide better living conditions
.
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.
 Availability of highly paid jobs, better working environment
,
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,
 opportunity to work in international companies, better infrastructures are some of the attractive factors that result in migration.
For instance
, healthcare
workers especially
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workers, especially
 skilled doctors and surgeons move to UK and USA looking for highly paid jobs and
also
 to get an opportunity to do
further
 research and earn new skills in their field. Since economic advancement hugely depends on the contributions made by skilled professional in various fields One of the major
problem
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problems
 due to
this
 trend is in decrease in
development
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the development
 of own country.
For example
, a recent survey conducted in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 revealed that there is a sharp decline in the number of nurses available to cater to patient needs when compared to other countries
.
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.
 In conclusion, several people are moving abroad in search of
better life
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a better life
, but
this
 can result in
lack
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a lack
 of human
resoures
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
resource
 which in turn leads to downward growth of their own country's economy.
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