Today the majority of children are raised by their grandparents, due to the fact that their parents are busy working. To what extent do you think it affects the whole family?
Many people believe that kids should be raised by their parents while there are some who believe that children should be raised by their grandparents. In my opinion, it is better for children to be raised by
both
parents and grandparents because parenting requires a great deal of time and some special skills and it is not always possible for young parents to possess them both
. Personally, I would like to raise my children on my own, but I will also
very much appreciate the help of my parents.
Parents are certainly more responsible than grandparents for raising children. However
, several lines of evidence suggest that working parents find it difficult to manage both
work and family due to their busy schedule. They will certainly benefit if their parents are around to take care of their babies. Also most
parents are more comfortable about leaving their children in the responsibility of their grandparents than in a day responsibility home. Accept comma addition
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This
is because grandparents are naturally fond of their grandchildren and will take great care to ensure their well being. Also
grandparents are better than parents at inculcating values in young children. Needless to say, children who grow up under the foster care of their grandparents tend to be more family oriented and compassionate.
On the other hand
, grandparents alone cannot take good responsibility of the children. To start with, most of them tend to be overindulgent. They will often go out of their way to satisfy every whim and fancy of their grandparents. This
kind of pampering may hurt the overall development of their children. Parents, by contrast
, are more likely to set limits and enforce a code of conduct. Also in
most families parents tend to be more educated than grandparents and Accept comma addition
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hence
they are better at helping the children with their homework and studies.
To conclude, in my opinion, both
parents and grandparents have an equal role to play in the development of children. If grandparents help with the raising of their grandchildren's life will be a lot less stressful for busy working parents. In the end, this
arrangement will benefit all.Submitted by linh phan on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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