Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

The majority of toys are produced
especiallt
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
for children, and
grown-ups
a fully developed person from maturity onward
grownups
grownups'
grownup's
find them very essential to have for their babies. Of course,
toy's general purpose
Suggestion
the toy's general purpose
is to entertain the players. The wide range of toys can enhance the child's happiness level;
however
, the happiness from playing with the large number of non-living things can't compare to that from enjoying with their families. Different materials are crafted into a variety of toys
such
as, dolls made from wool and fur, controlled car manufactured from steel or plastic, and building blocks made from wood. They are painted
colorfully
in a colorful
colourfully
to attract kids' attention.
Therefore
, the variation of shapes, sized, materials, and
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
stimulates
Suggestion
stimulate
the children's imagination while playing with these toys. A girl might imagine herself, living in the teddy bear's house, having an afternoon tea, while a boy might aggressively
attacks
Suggestion
attack
his rivals with toy guns. To have limited sources of toys means to narrow down their imagination and creativity. So, one of the advantages of having plenty of toys is to encourage kids to express their creativity. Toys can connect the relationship between parents and their children.
Pratically
Suggestion
Practically
, mother and father can join the play with
kids
Suggestion
the kids
and pretend to be an actor or actress in their imaginative stories.
On the other hand
, some adults might conclude that all sources of children's enjoyment come from playing with the surrounding toys. These events
are often occured
Suggestion
have often occurred
are often occurred
often occur
in busy parents, as they make toys as their representatives while they are working. In fact, those non-living items can capture the child's interest in only short term. Children, who has been
picturing
Suggestion
pictured
themselves with the same environment (same types of toys), may get bored very easily,
eventhough
Suggestion
even though
there is
a
Suggestion
an
enormous pile of toys in front of them. Having a large number of toys can indicate how lonely the children are.
Moreover
, some children might get stuck in their illusion, and cannot perceive the actual world.
Consequently
, those kids, when they have grown up, would pretend to be 7-year-old children, craving for their parents' love. In summary, families can get their children an unlimited number of toys, yet the mother and father have to take good care of and build delightful memories with their children.
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