Many people think that happiness relies upon the individual, while others think it is affected by other factors. discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many people think that
happiness
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is our responsibility, while others believe that external factors play a major role in it. I believe we can not link our
happiness
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to physical entities, nor to persons, cause it will only deprive us of more things that could make us happier. We don’t live in a bubble, we are not independent, so that it is reasonable to associate our
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with external factors
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as money, success, parents' approval, or even the need to fit into society. “Free
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”, as I would call it, is only lived during our childhood. We found joy in trivial things and anything would put a smile on our faces, but once we knew the real world the perspective of
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changed and it became the result of the synergy between several factors,
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, a degree, a career, a home, and a family.
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, how can you be happy if you are struggling to feed your family, to keep a job or to succeed in your studies? Nothing is free and nor is
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.
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, it is not in our
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hands
to ensure
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, like everything else in
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life we should work hard for it.
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, some people believe that if we want to be truly happy we need to learn how to be happy on our own and never associate our
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with non-stop changing factors.
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, how can we find joy with the weight of responsibilities, thinking about the future, or always adapting to changes so we can maintain
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illusion
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? It is advisable to feed our ambitions, yet we cannot make it the sole mean to achieve
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.
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, can a rich man
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is
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happy without the love of a family, can a poor man be satisfied with the cosiness of his small house, the laughter of his children and the hunger of their bellies.
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can be found in whenever we want only if we don’t
bound
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it something. In my opinion, the peace of mind and heart is the only important thing in
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life.
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is only an illusion, something we create it cause we needed a purpose to live, to thrive and to make sense of
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hardship we are facing. I believe
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is not the light at the end of the tunnel, it is not the end of a race, it is only the feeling of being grateful for a small thing.
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, I strongly believe that if you lose your inner child, you can be happy because true
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is not bound to anything or anyone. To conclude, every one of us deserves to be happy, whatever meaning or definition we give it, we should always search for it and find it in ourselves or in other factors.
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