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Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the period of
time
, the human activities to relax themselves has evolved a lot. It is generally believed that
such
 changes in personal interest mainly showcase the
comman
belonging to or participated in by a community as a whole; public
common
command
 pattern following by the
society
 rather than
depicing
a representation by picture or portraiture
depicting
 the actual status of their
part
time
 exercises. I completely agree with the above mentioned notion.
To begin
 with, in the present scenario, there are people who are quite particular in continuing their hobby which they are doing from quite a long
time
. It reflects their passion. They are not being
part
 of any rat race rather they have clarity in their thoughts about the need of performing them.
Consequently
,
such
 activities become a
part
 of their everyday routine and provide them with
actual meaning
Suggestion
the actual meaning
 of utilising their spare
time
.
For instance
, the older people
usually prefers
Suggestion
usually prefer
 to play chess as a hobby. It completes their day in
actual way
Suggestion
actual ways
the actual way
an actual way
.
Therefore
, not all but some portion of
society
 are aware of what they need
in
Suggestion
into
 reality.
On the contrary
, a major section of the
society
 goes with flow of
latest trends
Suggestion
the latest trends
. They are unaware of their own needs. Due to
latest advancements
Suggestion
the latest advancements
 in technology and
upgradation
 in
society
, people get easily trapped and start following the same. There are two main reasons behind it.
Firstly
, they want to keep oneself updated.
Secondly
,
may be
by chance
maybe
 they are practicing the concept of hit and try to provide peace to their mind. They could get easily bored with
similar
Suggestion
a similar time pass
time
 pass.
For example
, a child has developed a hobby of playing piano, but shifted to playing football as most of his friends are there in the team.
Such
 a change is to provide happiness to oneself. In short, the hobbies
arer
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
 changed due to latest trends. To conclude,
this
 essay discussed the perception of people with
focussed aim
Suggestion
the focussed aim
a focussed aim
 to conduct
part
time
 exercises as well as the possible reasons for adopting the fashion. I partially agree with statement as the circumstances in life plays more significant role than fashion and individual need.
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