Many parents encourage young people to leave their home when they become older, while others think that they should stay with their family. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued that youngsters should move out of their home and start living independently. Despite undeniable reasons for
this
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, which are discussed below, I would side with those who think living with parents is
the better
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the best
way
for
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to
grow-ups to cast their future. On the one hand, I understand why some people advocate the opinion of letting their grown up children live separately.
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, without the shadow of any family members, youngsters start to learn how to manage their own lives, from daily needs to financial issues.
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brings them valuable experience to boost their self-growth and become more self-reliant and responsible.
Secondly
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, the less parental supervision there is, the less interference
grow
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grows
-ups have to face with when it comes to crucial decisions
such
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as quitting a job, moving to
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
cities or running
a
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at
start-up.
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would
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encourage them to take risks and broaden their career prospects.
On the other hand
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, I would argue that it is essential for youngsters to postpone moving out. Grow-ups living with their family would receive financial support from parents, so there is no need for them to monthly worry about a deluge of bills.
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, safety is the top priority. Youngsters who suffer ailments might feel secure when they are with parents. In some cases, living alone or with random strangers, inexperienced and vulnerable young people are easy to get involved in
dangers
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
and likely to be victims of crimes.
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, if they live together with their family, they will be covered against wrong crowds. In conclusion, it seems to me that it is safer and more beneficial to live under the same roof with parents,
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of moving
apart especially
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apart, especially
when youngsters are not mature enough to start an independent
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life
.
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