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During the case of George Floyd's murder by the US police, many people gather around in the streets across the country to protest the violation of human rights and race by the police. However, some people looted and ransacked the shops during the protest. Some analysts urge the government to handle the looting by force, while others argue that the government should handle it carefully.

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The chart above illustrates the number of complaints from to the Airline in a period of six months starting from January to June in 2009. If viewed from the graph, in general, it can be said that complaints to the airline via
email
 within a period of six months continue to decline, while
on the other hand
, complaints by
telephone
 and direct complaints every month were
increase
Suggestion
increased
, especially on direct complaints. The highest complaint via
email
 occurred in January which reached 700 complaints,
this
 is quite high when compared to direct complaints which only reached 400, but complaints via
email
 are still below the
telephone
 complaints that exist
at
Suggestion
in
 900.
However
, at complaints via e-mail have decreased every month, until March, these complaints dropped dramatically to touch the number 300 complaints from May and June.
On the other hand
,
although
 the level of direct complaints is very low when compared to complaints via
email
 and
telephone
, now continues to grow and increase dramatically to reach 1,900 complaints in June 2009. Whereas in February, complaints in the form of emails had decreased to 100 complaints which originally had 900 complaints in January.
However
, after experiencing a decline, complaints by
telephone
 returned every month to reach 1,600 complaints in June.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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