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You were absent from an important event held by the company you work for. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Apologize for your absence and explain the reasoning Explain why you had to be at the other event Explain what you will do to catch up Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr. Brannagan

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Dear Mr Brannagan, I am writing to apologize that I could not show up at the company's summit
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 week. I would love to be there and see your speech about our team´s achievements for
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the company. So, I am really sorry about that.
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 I had trouble, my son was sick and I needed to take him to the hospital. He is just 5 years old and there was no one to do
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 for me.
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, I believe that it is important for him, at
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 age, to feel that I will be there for him when he needs me. Because of
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, I have decided to miss the conference to help him.
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, in regard to missing the content of the conference, there are no worries. The People team recorded all the meetings for the employees in other countries, so all the content
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 recorded. To catch up I will watch all the videos today, and if I have any doubts I will ask my colleagues. Thank you for understanding. Sincerely, Dani
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph carries a single idea for clearer structure and ease of understanding.
coherence cohesion
A logical structure is present, but can be enhanced by improving the transitions between ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, provide more details about the importance of the event missed and possibly suggest a specific way to contribute after catching up on the information.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone consistently throughout the letter to align with the professional context.
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