Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Market

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The market

is a huge source for people to find any type of goods starting, especially cooking goods and a lot of things you can commonly spot in a kitchen. And as time passes, many markets have developed in different ways.Nowadays

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local markets are filled with imported goods as well as domestic goods. Some people argue that supermarkets should only sell food produced within their own

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however I

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however, I

disagree with that statement and will be elaborating my reasons regarding

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topic through

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essay. If we look closer, we can clearly see how importing goods

has brought

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have brought

so many benefits to the

country

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as well as other individuals that people didn’t realize. We all know that sometimes the

country

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’s supply cannot meet the demand of the citizens. Every year, the birth rate is multiplied by two times, causing a

country

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to be overpopulated. Due to

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, people need more land for a roof under their

head which

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head, which

contributes to the decline of land used for agriculture resulting in insufficient foods for people.

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, there are

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countries that are unable to plant certain kinds of fruits and vegetables due to the dissimilarity of weather, seasons, and

temperature which

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temperature, which

reduces the chance for citizens to enjoy other kinds of delicious foods. In

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case, the government should enhance the import of international goods from other countries. Enterprises will be more open minded and are kept updated

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about

what other countries have been developing, and they can

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use

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knowledge to discover how and what are the weaknesses of their products compared to other

country

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’s products. If only domestic goods are sold in the market, business and profit will fall simultaneously, and competition will only occur within domestic business.

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, they may earn high profit at the beginning after a new product is launched, but their earnings will gradually fall as people start to lose interest because there are no changes being made. In conclusion, it is not necessary for a supermarket not to display imported goods. It allows customers to enjoy worldwide products, and

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gives motivation and ideas for many enterprises. As long as domestic goods and foreign goods are promoted equally in one’s

country

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, I believe that it is not a big issue and

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will lead to a better future.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

384 words

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