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Some people think that children should start school at the age of six or seven while others think that children should start school as young as possible. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Though, most of the people come up with an argument that, kids have to start their
education
 after they reach five years, but, on other hand, few say that, they have to start as soon as they reach age three. In my opinion, kids have to start their schooling as soon as they learn how to talk and walk. At least, they have to be joined in a play
school
 so that, they learn basic manners and way of speaking and behaving.
Education
 is more important these days, our way of living is totally dependent on how educated we are. In olden days, there were no proper
education
 system and number of schools were less. People are forced to work rather than
education
. These trends followed for so many years and still it is seen in some part of the world.
For example
, people from 18th and early 19th century are less educated because of their parents have less scope on how
education
 matter to them. Nowadays, parents got an idea and came to know about the importance of
education
. Most of the people showing their interest to join kids in
school
 at the early stage itself because they believe that in spite of being at home they can learn some important things when they go to
school
.
On the other hand
, the other side of the coin, parents who think opposite to it, they believe that if they send their kids to
school
 in the early age, their focus will distracted and they
also
 lose their affection with them. But, in my opinion, parents should allow their children to attend the
school
 at a very young age because they learn valuable things which we cannot teach them at home.
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