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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is rightly said that advancement in the field of machinery can have a huge impact on our status.Status is the basic necessity of the human survival and is the cause of existence of humans.I strongly agree with the statement that automation and climate are interrelated.
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However, there
 are some negative effects to the surroundings. According to me, mobiles and gadgets now have inbuilt system for the people to know the air quality index in their particular area.Other than
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 man has now made solar panels with which humans can now save sun's energy for future handling.
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, people in the slum areas are now instilled with solar panels so that they can make help of the natural resources in the surroundings. People
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 make service of gobar gas and other setting, friendly gases so that they can make the adoption of machinery.The windmill which is installed in villages is used for generating electricity. But machinery has some negative effects as well.
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, the air conditioned, which is used by most of the people is the main cause of global warming.The mobile network towers which are set up in areas is the main cause of deforestation taking away the homes of millions of birds.The vehicles which run on petrol emit harmful gases, which are very harmful for our habitat. I would like to conclude my essay by saying that automation has an impact on our climate, but if the networks are used in a positive way they can help our surroundings grow more than the usual.Individuals should benefit automation, which is much more Eco friendly and helps humans to sustain life on earth,
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 makes the lives of animals
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 easy and healthy.
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