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Now, many scientific institutes conduct research on live animals. Some people regard it as cruel and unnecessary while others believe it is justified in the interest of human welfare. Discuss the two views and give your reasons. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is felt by some that youngsters ought to be raised in modernized urban settings, while others prefer environment as it offers a healthier lifestyle.
However
, in my opinion the facilities and the opportunities that
city
 life has to offer, simply cannot be found in rural settings. Admittedly, countryside encourages a healthier lifestyle. Children are able to spend the majority of their spare time outdoors in the nature, which defeats the sedentary lifestyle
that is
 associated with
city
 life.
As a result
, not only they grow up to be fitter in a cleaner, pollution-free environment, but they
also
 become more connected with the nature around them.
Moreover
, children in natural areas are comparatively more social. Largely due to lower crime rates, people are more inclined to interact and trust one another. According to a survey of multiple colleges in the US, people from the land tend to make friends more readily compared to their
city
 counterparts.
However
, the countryside can only offer so much in regards to children’s future prospects and eventually they have to move to cities for better/ more challenging and exciting opportunities.
On the other hand
, urban settings provide children with plethora of opportunities.
For instance
, extra-curricular activities are part of curriculum in multiple schools in the
city
, that allow students to participate in an array of different sports and activities.
This
 gives students an opportunity to unfold, perhaps, their hidden talents.
Additionally
, metropolitan areas incorporate a variety of differently-abled institutions. As
such
, parents can enrol their special children to get the best education possible, which might not be available nor feasible in rural settings.
Finally
, advanced technology offers advanced medical services. If youngsters get sick, they can be immediately treated in modern medical facilities, which incorporate the best treatments and equipment.
However
,
such
 developed hospitals or clinical settings are not usually available in the suburbs. In conclusion,
although
Suggestion
despite
 being raised in the clean environment of
countryside
Suggestion
the countryside
 provides some benefits, I believe cities have more opportunities to provide children with that the suburbs cannot compete with.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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