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While some people consider air pollution to be the most dangerous environmental problem, others believe that soil pollution has a more serious effect on our world. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, environmental
pollution
 is one of the most devastating impacts of human activities on the Earth. There are four types of
pollution
, namely,
air
pollution
, water
pollution
,
soil
pollution
 and noise
pollution
. Some people believe that
air
pollution
 is the most pressing problem while others are convinced that
soil
pollution
 has an implicit threat.
This
 essay will discuss both statements and give some justifications for why I advocate the former. On the one hand,
soil
pollution
 consists of damaging long-term effects.
Soil
 fertility will no longer remain if
this
 kind of
pollution
 constantly continues. Inorganic waste and the overuse of chemical fertilizers, which are attributed to the cause of
soil
 deterioration, can affect harmful to local people's health
such
 as cancer from chromium, damages in the nervous system from lead, etc.
Soil
 that has been contaminated should no longer be used to grow food, because the chemicals can leech into the food and harm people who eat it.
On the other hand
, I totally believe that
air
pollution
 creates much more detrimental issues. Long-standing impacts on inhabitants' health stemming from
air
pollution
 include heart disease, lung cancer, and respiratory diseases
such
 as emphysema.
Air
pollution
 can
also
 directly contaminate the surface of bodies of water and
soil
, which will kill crops or reduce their yield.
Air
pollution
 will certainly contribute to the greenhouse effect which can lead to a series of environmental problems
such
 as Increase in average temperatures and temperature extremes, polar ice melting, rise of sea levels, etc. By means of conclusion,
although
 some people think that
soil
pollution
 contains hazardous impacts, I am firmly convinced that
air
pollution
 causes more toxic effects. It is vital that governments should do something from now to prevent the development of environmental
pollution
.
Submitted by Toàn Thắng Đặng on

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