Many feel that happiness is mainly an individual responsibility while others feel that there are important external factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that
happiness
is our responsibility, while others believe that external factors play a major role in it. I believe, we cannot link our
happiness
to physical entities, nor persons, mainly because it will only deprive us of more things that could make us happier. Many people think that we don’t live in a bubble, we are not that independent or isolated, so it is only reasonable to associate our
happiness
with external factors
such
as money, success, parents' approval, or even to be loved by someone. “Free
Happiness
”, as they would call it, is only lived during our childhood where children find
joy
in trivial things and anything would put a smile on their faces, but once they come to know the real world, the perspective of enjoyment changes and it became the result of the synergy between several factors (ex. A degree, a career, a home, and a family).
For instance
, how can a person be happy if he/she is struggling to feed her/his family, to keep a job or to succeed in his/her studies?
Therefore
, it is not in our hands to ensure contentment, like everything else in
this
life we should work hard for it.
On the other hand
, some people believe that if we want to be truly happy we need to learn how to be happy on our own and never associate our prosperity with non-stop changing factors.
furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
, how can we find
joy
with the weight of responsibilities, thinking about the future, or always adapting to changes so we can maintain
this
illusion
happiness
? It is advisable to feed our ambitions, yet we cannot make it the sole mean to achieve it.
For instance
, can a rich man is happy without the love of a family, can a poor man be satisfied with the cosiness of his small house, the laughter of his children and the hunger of their bellies.
Happiness
can be found in whenever we want only if we don’t bind it something and stop comparing our lives with others. In my opinion, the peace of mind and heart is the only important thing in
this
life.
happiness
Suggestion
Happiness
is only an illusion, something we create it cause we need a purpose to live, to thrive and to make sense of
this
hardship we are facing. I believe that,
joy
is not the light at the end of the tunnel, it is not the end of a race, But it is the feeling of being grateful for a small thing.
Also
, I strongly believe that if you lose your inner child, you cannot be happy because true unconditional contentment is not bound to anything or anyone. To conclude, every one of us has his own definition of
happiness
. Some of us choose to find
joy
in small things like watching the sunrise, listening to music, helping each others. While, others reach it by succeeding life, at work, or finding love.
Finally
, it is up to us to choose where to find true
happiness
.
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