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Some people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people’s private life, while others think it should be controlled. Discuss both views

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Some people argue that, it is a good thing to expose the details of a person's private life via newspapers while the others argue that, it has to be controlled.
Therefore
, following
this
 essay will explain the both views in detail and
Then
 I'll reach to a proper conclusion. On the one hand, it can be said that, the media are playing a big role in the society today. When talking about the newspapers, we can see that, there are several ways that has used to reveal the people's personal life. It can be any reason, whether it is about the one's good or bad incident,
such
 media publishers are included the details in a way of out of the control
as a result
 of
this
, some of the information in the
such
 newspapers is irrelevant or false or misleading information and
then
 again,
this
 can be threatening to those people's personal lives.
In addition
 to
this
,
such
 people can be suffering from emotionally where can lead to number health problems
such
 as heart disease, self isolation, lack of confidence, depression and much more.
On the other hand
, it is important to provide the right information from the publishers those who charge for
this
.
For example
, The government should have a committee to monitor the
such
 activities of the media in the meantime, make the corrections when if needed so. As mentioned before,
such
 scheme will help to avoid the many misleading activities happening in the newspapers.
Finally
, to conclude
this
, it can be said that, the government should step out for the media activities. To avoid these media's unnecessary activities, it is important to have a committee to observe their behaviour, so
this
 will help to create a better society.
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