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Competitiveness among high school students should be encouraged. Do you agree or disagree?

#competitiveness #school #students
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Education makes a person
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
 and competition ensures the quality is maintained at every step. Pupils who are studying in
calsses
a collection of things sharing a common attribute
classes
 from
eighth
the cardinal number that is the sum of seven and one
eight
 to ten should be
encourage
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encouraged
 to take part in various competitions to make them
extra ordinary
beyond what is ordinary or usual; highly unusual or exceptional or remarkable
extraordinary
 students. Children enrolled in high schools are sensible
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they have successfully passed their primary school examinations.
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, they now tend to focus more on their studies and build their areas of interest. The management of schools should organise activities to boost the interest of their students.
For example
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,
compeitions
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competitions
compositions
compilations
 like debate,
quizes
an examination consisting of a few short questions
quizzes
, painting and poetry can be held to increase knowledge of history, art and literature.
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, sports related tournaments
such
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 as swimming, cricket and
basket ball
a game played on a court by two opposing teams of 5 players; points are scored by throwing the ball through an elevated horizontal hoop
basketball
 should be announced
for
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to
 the
studnets
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
students
 who love physical activities. These arrangements not only motivates kids to their favourite
hobbies but
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hobbies, but
also
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 increases their focus and efforts in their life.
This
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 is to say, that the pupils who participate in institute organised functions, tend to build a sense of hard work, efforts and achievement in them. 173 Competition is necessary to rate the students as per their abilities and efforts.
This
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 is
also
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 one of the
way
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ways
 to find talent which can be
further
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 polished and used for various state, national as well as international matches. To sum up, since high school
studnets
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
students
 tend to be in their
teen age
being of the age 13 through 19
teenage
 and are full of energy, it is always beneficial to explore their hidden qualities and give them a
plateform
a raised horizontal surface
platform
 to showcase them. And to do
this
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, we can not have a better solution than to engage them in
such
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 high school level competitions.
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