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Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with trade, health and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

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Some are of the opinion that wealthier nations should extend their hand to assist the poorer nations with regard to the public services namely trade, health and education. One of the controversial topics whether
this
 is an obligation is a matter for debate. I wholeheartedly concur with
this
 statement due to two main reasons,
firstly
, offering help to the needy is undoubtedly ethical and
secondly
, it's all boiled down to
this
 factor, self interest. Our common humanity means that those of us who are doing well should help those whose basic needs are not met. In part, our personal and national wealth has often been created by the exploitation of poor people
such
 as colonial extraction of resources, the slavery and opium trades, unfair international trade and finance practices.
For example
, reallocating just one percent of global wealth would eradicate extreme income poverty at a stroke.
Furthermore
, the richer
country
 should be responsible for the well-being of its people, in another word, self interest. Allowing outsiders to influence the development of a
country
 is completely preposterous as it might
subsequently
 render to grave matters. To exemplify, the outbreak of Corona virus has had adversely impacted on the world economy and health alike. Only if the affluent
country impart
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country, impart
 knowledge about the danger of consuming inedible animal, the pandemic will not occur. Health issues are not limited to any particular
country
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country, therefore
therefore
 it is foolish to claim that only those nations that start the cause should be responsible for it. Before long, the impact of the actions caused by developing nations will soon be felt in the industrialized world,
hence
 it is imperative to provide aid to developing
country
 when they need it the most. Overall, the aforementioned reasons strongly illustrate that the aids are imperative as it does not only helps the developing nations to improve their standard of living, the world is
also
 a better, happier and a safer place to live in.
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