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It is observed that communication between family members in today's time is less as compared tothe past. However, some people do not think so. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely believed that there is less connection among family members as compared to the past. Contrary to
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 popular opinion, I believe the families are able to communicate more nowadays as more and more electronic means of contact are being introduced.
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, I do think face-to-face meetings between family members,
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, are considerably reduced relative to the past. Back in the past, if you and your family had to live in different cities, the only communication method was either to write a letter or at best, with the invention of phones, to call. These days, we have more means to connect with family members than we ever had.
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 reflects that whether you are travelling to a different city or an entirely different country, you can still reach out your family through the use of various electronic methods,
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 as emails, social media sites and mobile apps. The above-mentioned thoughts are derived from my own personal experiences.
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, my parents are living in Pakistan and anytime I like to connect with them, I can either do audio or video call with no disruption whatsoever.
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, would not be possible if I were to be living in the 19th century. Having said that, does
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 mean face-to-face meetings are
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 increased? Definitely not. The flipped side of introducing these methods is that family members do not feel as much need to visit each other, since they can utilize these technological means to communicate. Whereas, in the past, due to having less means of communications, families used to utilize every opportunity to see each other in physical. In conclusion, whereas
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 enhancement in communication methods has increased connection between families, face to face setups are significantly reduced as compared to the past.
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