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Some people believe that countries should produce food that population eats, and import food as less as possible. Agree or disagree?

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There were an argument that countries should produce
food
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 from the local farm for all of the people eats, and import meat as little as possible. Following
this
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, it depends on the significant demand of the markets which customers prefer to spend money on new
product
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 especially they are from foreign countries.
To begin
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 with,
weather
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the weather
 plays on the
limit
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limited
 role that some countries cannot produce by their own.
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, Laos is the landlocked provincial which needs to construction seafoods because there is an iodine which is an important for the health. People have to but these foods at an expensive price.
On the other hand
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,
product
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 from factories in the country could rise a chance for poor people to
having
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have
 jobs. Government has to develop and improve an economy of the country.
Moreover
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, import
food
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 is expensive so government should limit the price for
solve
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solving
 an
unequivalent
a person or thing equal to another in value or measure or force or effect or significance etc
equivalent
 problem between poor and rich people. In conclusion, I believe that government should improve a quality
for
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of
 the
food
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product
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. Local
food
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product
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 is the other way to increase and give more chance for poor people.
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, there
is some of
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is some food
food
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product
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 that cannot produce by the own countries.
Hence
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, the country
need
Suggestion
needs
 to import from other countries, but,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should limit the price for reducing a gaining advantage problem.
Submitted by Natchayaphon Ngoenwilai on

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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