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Some parents think it is good to give their children mobile phone, while others disagree. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Mobile phones have become very necessary to everybody's life. Nowadays, phones are very much in trend for use. Most of the parents believe that it is better to give cellular to their children, but, some do not believe in that.
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Firstly
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, At present, Many parents are believed to buy mobile for their children because, There are various reasons about needing the cell
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. At
first
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, A long distance talk can be covered by the satellite phones or mobile phones, and if someone wants to send any important notes to anyone can be done by the phones.
For instance
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, the children are living far from their parents, so the
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 can be used for communication purpose and
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, for their college related work purpose.
On the other hand
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, Some parents are not believed to buy the
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 to their children because, there are some drawbacks about giving
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 to their children.
To begin
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 with, Many children are spending their time on mobile for playing games or watching movies.
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, In a social network, many cyber attacks occur in phones. It can hack your every personal details and banking details too.
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, Many children are witnessing about cyber attacks which is present on any website unknowingly so, if they select at any unknown website, it can be hacked by the hackers. In my opinion, It depends upon the kids who are using
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phone
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phones
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 for their benefit or not. The parents should check their phones, if they are misusing the
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 or using the
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 for good. I think the parents should decide about giving cellular or not. In conclusion, There are some advantages and disadvantages about giving
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 to their children. But, it totally depends upon the kids for better use of mobile
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Submitted by Divyesh R Bhavsar on

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