social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks discuss both views

It is considered by online
platform
most popular in all generations, meanwhile they most
share
their private thought social media
this
way will bring a several consequence to
user
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the user
. Social media not only is a trendy
phenomenon but
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phenomenon, but
also
is an essential entertainment for all generations, it's become an inseparable in our daily life.
However most
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However, most
people regularly spend a lot of time in social media
such
as Instagram, Facebook to name but a few. Social media as a
significant
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sign
to receive and input
information
.While social media are a harmful tool if we
use
it incorrectly.
This
essay will gather about the risks and benefits,
thus
will from a logical conclusion. As we all know, social media have a wind variety of entertainment videos, it attracts different generation to watch and grab their attention.
Firstly
, for the teenage group, social media as a
share
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shared
emotion and daily life
platform
. As the anonymous system,
user
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users
always
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always shares
share
their deep emotion and stories on the social media websites, apart from that, they can "like" and "comment" on the photos that can increase interpersonal with their friends.
Secondly
, for family groups, social media as they can know their
childern
private life, because
childern
spend most time on social media, they alwats negect or decline to communicate with their parents, meanwile parents do not understand their
childern
value and what is their hobby so that most family will
use
social media to understand their
childern
, even they can increase the conversation topic with their
childern
.
Finally
, for the mature persons
such
as businesses, they hope to establish their business, social media provides a
platform
to. Them establish or create a business.
On the other hand
, social media don't only have benefits but
also
have several risks for
user
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users
the user
. To start with,
share
personal
information
on social media, it may steal
by
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from
thieves, personal
information
is our identify and determine who I am, it is
most significant symbol
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the most significant symbol
, if our privacy stolen, the thief may
use
your
information
to do any illegal activities
such
as cheating.
Furthermore
, as I mention that most people will
share
the emotion and stories, most social media have an anonymous system that they can input some hateful comments to attract people, it will become a cyber bullying. In addiction, social media is one of the function "
share
" function.
For example
, if you post some
information
on your
platform
, another
user
can
share
or forward to other people and you don't know who forward your post or
information
therefore
it will lead you
information
lose and most people recognize your details. To sum up, if we
use
social media be smart and careful, it will be a lot of entertaining for us,
However
, social media can not input too much sensitive
information
, if not, it will be a harmful tools.
such
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Such
as losing
information
and cyber bullying.
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