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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#life #technology
Nowadays, advanced technologies have extremely impacted on our lives as they have changed
ways
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the ways
 of humans' living for more than a decade. Some may say that these tools help us to have an easier lifestyle, while some people think that these have made our lives too complicated. I agree with
this
 statement and will explore about pros and cons of technologies through
this
 essay.
Firstly
, technological advances have become an important equipment because it provides us more convenient than before.
For example
, the internet has become an imperative factor for running businesses as there are a lot of online sales, and well known for most new generations.
Moreover
,
this
 option offers a purchaser to have an easy way to buy things.
Secondly
, most of
students
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the students
 are tending to study from online as there is a pandemic of the Covid-19 virus.
Thus
, in order to stop spreading of
this
 disease, people need to stay in their home.
On the other hand
, some elderly say that a high
technologies
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technology
have
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has
 a negative effect on their daily lives as it is too difficult to learn and adapt their lifestyle.
For instance
, my grandmother prefers using home phone to a smartphone because she cannot see the screen of mobile phone well as its pictures are too small for her.
Additionally
, most of senior groups have a tough time when they have to use screen touching because their blurred vision. To sum up,
although
, there are a number of benefits of technological advancement as they have improved the ways of living, some groups have found a hard time of adjusting their
lives
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life's
life
 path. I firmly agree that a high technology has more advantages than its disadvantages.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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