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You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

#job #course #teachers #situation #time #action
Dear Sir, I currently
work
 as a Senior Software Engineer for Google, Inc. and I recently enrolled in the part-time evening MBA course at the Carlson School of Management. I am writing to request a change in my enrollment
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 the distance MBA program due to my conflicting
work
 schedule. I was recently assigned a project to a client in Australia. I am expected to
work
 during the time
that is
 convenient to the client; and
as a result
, my
work
 timing has shifted to 2 pm - 1 am.
In addition
, the project is expected to
last
 for eight months.
Hence
, I cannot pursue the evening course anymore. I am sure that I am capable of finishing the assignments and examinations at my own pace. As far as I am concerned, both the programs cost the same.
Hence
, I believe that it would not cause any issues. If
this
 is not possible, I prefer to drop from the course and claim
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a refund of my tuition fees. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Jane Doe.
Submitted by Sanjay Srirama on

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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