More children in developing countries are becoming overweight.This is a serious problem in wealthy countries.

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threatening the existence of humankind.

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, Developed countries have a big challenge to control the size of young

children

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.

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essay will discuss the reasons

of

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for

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obesity and its effects on

children

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. In

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modern age, everybody is rushing towards their individual goals and fully occupied

to earn

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with earning

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money. In

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busy life,  when both

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parents are working

have

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no time to cook for their

children

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,

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forces their

children

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to switch

on

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unhealthy

food

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habits like eating junk

food

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, in 2019, school

children

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are

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recorded to consume 49% of MacDonald’s.

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growth in eating processed

food

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is the main cause of increasing weight in

children

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.

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, the advancement of video

games

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makes

children

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bound to stay at home.

Children

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are so fascinated by these

games

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that they do not want to lose any chance to play with them. These cause a decline in outdoor play and ultimately, no physical exercise

lead

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them to chubbiness.

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survey conducted by the Australian Bureau of

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, 62% of

children

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preferred to play Video

games

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like Play Station and Wii etc.

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of playing outdoor

games

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is surely a very upsetting situation.

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has resulted in a rise of

generation

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which is not only lazy and obese, but

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very lethargic and unhealthy.

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,

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essay discussed the causes of rising overweight amongst

children

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of developing countries and

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provided the associated effects of

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trend. Indeed,

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unhealthy

food

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and

absence

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of physical exercise in the younger generation are the two

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main factors contributing to the growth of

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epidemic called obesity.

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further

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paves the way to heart and respiratory

diseases

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disease

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vigour.