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Some people agree with spending lots of money on a large wedding, while others think it is a waste of money. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, some of the couples preparing for
marriage
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 are willing to throw expensive wedding parties.
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, others tend to pay less for their wedding ceremony. I tend more for the
second
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 opinion and will illustrate why in
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 essay. As in our present time, especially in the middle east region, the
marriage
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 expenses are already very high. Either when it comes to the apartment’s cost, the furniture, or even the honeymoon’s expenses. That’s why adding more financial obstacles to the whole
marriage
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 process by having an expensive wedding party doesn’t make any sense. And as an illustration for
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 is that the percentage of couples that doesn’t proceed in their
marriage
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 due to financial problems is very high. So,
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 most of the people marries only one time,
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 he or she have only one wedding party in their lifetime. Still, it is not rational at all to ruin your whole
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 because the burdens that already put on your back due to the highly expensive wedding night you had. Another aspect is that
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 elite and highly financed weddings sets a fake expectation for the whole coming couple’s
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. As they expect that their
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 with each other will be always at that standard and easiness of
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. While
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, any new couple’s
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 will be full of challenges and obstacles which they must face together to reach happiness.
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, as a sum up. Each
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marriage attempting
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marriage, attempting
 people must be very cautious when they set their wedding budget and insure always its affordable for their income and capabilities.
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