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Some people agree with spending lots of money on a large wedding, while others think it is a waste of money. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, some of the couples preparing for
marriage
 are willing to throw expensive wedding parties.
On the contrary
, others tend to pay less for their wedding ceremony. I tend more for the
second
 opinion and will illustrate why in
this
 essay. As in our present time, especially in the middle east region, the
marriage
 expenses are already very high. Either when it comes to the apartment’s cost, the furniture, or even the honeymoon’s expenses. That’s why adding more financial obstacles to the whole
marriage
 process by having an expensive wedding party doesn’t make any sense. And as an illustration for
this
 is that the percentage of couples that doesn’t proceed in their
marriage
 due to financial problems is very high. So,
although
 most of the people marries only one time,
thus
 he or she have only one wedding party in their lifetime. Still, it is not rational at all to ruin your whole
life
 because the burdens that already put on your back due to the highly expensive wedding night you had. Another aspect is that
such
 elite and highly financed weddings sets a fake expectation for the whole coming couple’s
life
. As they expect that their
life
 with each other will be always at that standard and easiness of
life
. While
on the contrary
, any new couple’s
life
 will be full of challenges and obstacles which they must face together to reach happiness.
Finally
, as a sum up. Each
marriage attempting
Accept comma addition
marriage, attempting
 people must be very cautious when they set their wedding budget and insure always its affordable for their income and capabilities.
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