Many believe that corporal punishment is the best way to instill discipline in a child.

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All demographics of society follow certain practices to regulate children's
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. Many believe that corporal
punishment
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is the best way to instill discipline in a
child
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.
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essay will argue why physical
punishment
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is absolutely unacceptable towards ingraining ethical conduct in children, even when it has remained a conventional practice to curb children's non-moral
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. Some parents hold the opinion that the best way to discipline a
child
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is through moderate striking. Foremost, parents are always cautious of the fact that their children can adopt bad influences from the society and
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, by inculcating fear of physical
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, they try to stop their kids from getting complicit in immoral acts.
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, linked to the previous, parents just follow the proven conventional approach of using force to establish obedience in a
child
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, without much thinking. Various studies have shown, that when parents turned to corporal
punishment
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, the children rather stayed more obedient.
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old age practice of raising kids can
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, be justified by various parents since it has shown the desired results more often than not. Despite the above reasonings, the idea of corporal
punishment
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does more bad than good to children. Parents overlook the negative aspects
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of practicing aggressive behaviours on the children, that would surface up later in the children's life. Children start to believe that it is completely fine to inflict physical pain to others in order to shape them the way they desire.
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assumption can lead to giving them
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a hard time
in maintaining relationships, since, in the later phase of life, they will prefer to resolve their matters through force rather than dialogue.
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can be backed up by the fact that a significant proportion of divorces results due to husbands being physically abusive towards their
spouces
a person's partner in marriage
spouses
spaces
spokes
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obviously
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obvious
roots down to the abusive
enviornment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
they were raised in.
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, I strongly believe that parents should tend to use other approaches to
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controlling
child
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's moral code, ones which do not affect
child
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's
personity
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personality
in
the longer
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the long
run.
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essay argued that corporal
punishment
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have long run negative implications
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of
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the children's life, and should never be considered acceptable even when it does discipline the
child
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. I strongly believe that
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the use
of force does more harm to the
child
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and that there are better and less repressive ways, which can rather be adopted to raise a good citizen of society.
Submitted by Hamza Fayyaz on

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