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With the development of technology children are now living in a world that is completely different to what it was 50 years ago. What problems does this cause for society and the family?

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Human life is hugely affected by the advent of
technology
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. In the modern era, digital world has taken the future by storm and people have depended so much on the
technology
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 than in the past. In the following essay, I intend to delve into the causes and the reasons for the phenomenon.
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 with, there is a plethora of reasons to explain why automation is spoiling kids.
Firstly
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, humans are addicted to digital world evidently. What I mean, without
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technology it
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technology, it
 is unlikely possible to survive in the current situation as everyone imbibed
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 into their life so much that even regular activities cannot be done if the
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 does not work.
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, as soon as our day starts, we command Alexa device to turn on the lights and play desired music through just with a voice call from the bed. Nowadays both the parents working hard to earn money for their child, kids left unattended at home, which makes them to engage with video games, watching television which in turn affect their health badly.
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, Modern
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 has an impact on the society immensely. As youth is too busy in playing games in their home, interactions with other kids will be lessened.
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, Libraries and parks will be empty. The government has put so much money in developing these parks and social stadiums to help kids. So if they are not used properly, it will be a huge lost to authorities. Due to
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, the Government does not allocate funds to society developments and it causes to the kids who are willing to play in parks and study in libraries. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that, it has a lot of benefits, but it is parents and kids responsibility to not to overuse.
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, the impact will be less. Kids should aware of when to use and when not to use these activities.
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