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Technology will eventually solve all the environmental issue. Do you agree or disagree

Technology will play significant role in addressing the environmental issues.
Now a days
Suggestion
Nowadays
, most of the countries are investing in the innovation areas which will help us to preserve our natural resources. I agree that the inventions will surely benefit us to save our
environment
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environment, however
however
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 there is still
individual’s equal responsibility
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the individual’s equal responsibility
 to save our earth. New environmentally friendly technologies have already shown great results for its ability to tackle global issues.
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example
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, the recent invention in electric vehicles made
considerable positive impact
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a considerable positive impact
 on the air quality. It has been
noticeable at
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noticeable, at
 least in my city. Another
example
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 is, we are getting good quality of water these days due to the new techniques used in water purification process. So, indeed, innovations can directly address some of the world’s most pressing environmental problems.
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, in many areas, technologies are not developing rapidly enough to resolve critical environmental problems.
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example
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, consider the alarming number of plastic particles in
World’s oceans
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the World’s oceans
. Some technological solution to
this
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 problem is still in progress. In the meantime, I think it is
individual’s responsibility
Suggestion
the individual’s responsibility
an individual’s responsibility
 to
minimize to use
Suggestion
minimize use
 of plastic and save our Earth!
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, people can start using reusable container or bags for food
instead
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 of single-use plastic bag. Changes like these must be adapted by a very large number of people because alternative solution is not yet available. In conclusion, I do agree that we will able to tackle environmental problems with the help of new inventions.
However
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, people
also
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 must work together to address most of the serious environmental issues.

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