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Sending space crafts and astronauts into space is very expensive. It would be of greater value for the government to use the money spent on space exploration to improve the quality of life on Earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays there is a great concern regarding
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 exploration.
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 problem demands more and more attention because lots of people claim it would be better to use tons of money spent on
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 to enhance life on Earth. I would argue, as I think that explorations can give us lots of opportunities to solve global problems.
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, we can confront
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 global issues as overpopulation and pollution. It is a fact that fossil fuels harm our planet and putting some solar panels into the
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 may provide us with a new safe sort of energy.
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, with new discoveries humanity will be closer to an ability to voyage beyond the outer realms of our solar system and in future they can even live there. That will definitely help to withstand overpopulation.
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 why spending budget on
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 is crucial and can put our
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lives
 forward in tier.
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, it might seem as too costly venture. Not only should be
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 donated, but
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 people that are in need. According to modern resources the United States could eradicate about 60% of the world’s hunger on its own.
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, if
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the government
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makes
 a simple shift of monetary resources, people would not suffer from lack of money. It might be suggested that private companies specialized in
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 would bring more absences on their own in order to decrease negative implication on budget caused by explorations. In conclusion,
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 exploration is worthwhile as it helps to resist global challenges so it should be sponsored
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Accept space
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 but more holistic approach is needed for government budget.
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,
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 explorations are necessary for all people to benefit our everyday life and make our existence more comfortable.

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