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Some people believe that if people are allowed to work after the age of 60 years, it would cause problems. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many of us believe that a person should retire from
work
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 duties at the
age
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 of 60,
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, others oppose that if people are allowed to do so they may face a few issues. As per my opinion, I partially agree and disagree with the statement and will elaborate my viewpoints in
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 detail.
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 with,
firstly
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, not allowing people to
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 after 60 may bring few problems to them like financial crises. It is not necessary that everyone have enough savings to live established, relaxed retired life, and
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,
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 people have to keep working to meet the basic needs of the family.
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, people have a habit of working from their young
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 and if not permitted to do so they may feel isolated and
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 apart from their social circle.
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,
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 separation may lead to mental illness like depression and emotional instability. To exemplify, my uncle has worked since the
age
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 of 22 and now after retiring from
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 he feels lonely and separated from professional and social life.
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, some are of the opinion that people should not
work
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 later the
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 of 60 as increased
work
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 load can deteriorate the overall health of a person after a certain
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.
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, most people have stationed jobs and it can lead to serious backbone damage and
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, after certain
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 person may not feel comfortable sitting whole day.
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, from the economy’s point of view, if people will not retire at a certain
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age it
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age, it
 would affect the job market for young generation. In conclusion, people should not be forced to retire at the
age
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 of 60;
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 the government should give liberty to senior citizens to decide basis their respective mental and physical health
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