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İn your opinion, what incentives could be offered that would persuade more people to embrace electric cars?

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The use of cars has increased a lot over the
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 century. There are a lot of methods of transportation
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 as motor bike, bus, train, bike or plane, but, cars remain the most popular way of transport.
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 is something we need to be aware of due to the gases we emit driving them. So, using electric cars is a good reason to collaborate with the environment as I will soon explain in
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 essay.
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 and foremost, it is clear that people need to foster a more environment-minded culture which is why there are a lot of campaigns with
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 issue as a spotlight.
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, I do not think that only sending visual messages to the viewers is enough, companies and important brands must take an action into it and reflect themselves as environmentally friendly.
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, the Government should aid
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 situation by not just informing people on why they should select electric vehicles, but by reducing the costs or implanting new laws that in fact, would oblige us to select
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 kind of transport.
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, by persuading us to use electric motors it would change our mentality and we can discover a new and easy way to transport. We would feel more technological and modern people,
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, would be a great meeting with your friends and realize that all of you are using electric vehicles,
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, it does not damage our climate.
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, the world is changing and it is exciting to know what new things are yet to arrive. To conclude, the use of electric cars is a statement
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 now out in the market, but the thing is that brands make publicity about it
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 no actions are taken and no economic benefits are shown. So, the state has to take action in order to facilitate the acquisition of electrical motors.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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