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Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as the older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say local authorities should allow people to build houses in the style of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The pie chart demonstrates the rate of the average family
food
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 budget between home cooking meal and
restaurant
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 meal in the year 1970 to 2000, while the graph compares the
number
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 of foods by fast-
food
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restaurant
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 and sit-down
restaurant
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 in the same
period
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. Overall, the concern in spending budget on a
restaurant
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 meal and the total of fast
food
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 that been consumed have increased significantly over the
period
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. In the beginning, regarding the chart, 90 % of people spending their
food
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 budget for the home cooking meal and only 10 % of the
restaurant
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 meal. The
restaurant
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 meal gained popularity and has been increased gradually to 15 % in 1980, 35% in 1990 and have the same percentage as the home cooked meal by the end of the
period
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. Turning to, the
number
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 of meals that consumed from a fast
food
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restaurant
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food
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restaurant
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 and sitting down
restaurant
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 is equal to 20
number
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 meal/year in 1970. The sitting down
restaurant
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 has a steady upward trend for the following years, which shows the value at about 25 in 1980, 40 in 1990 and around 45 by the end of the
period
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.
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in
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In
 contrast, the
number
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 of fast-
food
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 restaurants has slightly increased in the
first
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 ten years and it jumped up at about 90 by the end of the year 2000.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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