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Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this

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Working for a while after school and before going to
university
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 is a great way to acquire some practical skills and extra cash. Many students rely on their own funds to finance higher education and
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 could be a pathway. There are many benefits of taking up a job before starting to attend a
university
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. There could be a few disadvantages too. The benefits of employment go beyond mere financial gain and
work
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 experience. Jobs teach real life skills
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 as working with other people, managing
time
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 and handling money in a business. It prepares a person for the future. Socially,
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 could be a
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 when most young people make lasting friendships too. For some people it could very well be a necessity to earn to pay for a college degree. There are a few drawbacks. Students could use their
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 to study
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 and get more academic qualifications. Between school and
university
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 may not be the best
time
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 a career or get involved in the vicious cycle of life, they have their entire life to
work
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. The biggest drawback is that
work
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 could become a huge distraction and chances of continuing to
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 is far greater than if they don’t take up a job. On the whole, the benefits of working between school an college
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far outweighs
 the disadvantages. Working or taking up a job can never be bad. There is more to learn than to lose. Students must be encouraged to find jobs for a while before beginning to study at a
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.
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