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Some people prefer to do the same job their entire life rather than frequently changing jobs. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Changing a working organisation has been under question since the industrial revolution. Many employees believe that they should work in a same company for the entire of working life.
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, there has an opposite opinion that worker should change their job. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for both beliefs as well as proffer justification for my own viewpoint. Regarding those who remain in the same organisation, there are two vital advantages.
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, you will be familiar with the company culture deeply and mastered in working process.
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, you are able to solve problems better than a new employee who don't understand it well.
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, you will gain trust from your manager because they know your skill and capability. So, you will have more chances to get promoted than others.
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, I firmly believe that concept is obsolete. The obvious reason is that we are in the age of disruption. A business change tremendously all the time,
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 there is no guarantee that any experience can be used tomorrow. My close friend moss is a shining example of
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 topic. He is working in the pharmaceutical industry.
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, he was a pharmacist in sterile product
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 vaccine. Recently, he has been working in non-sterile product line. Both processes are completely different, but he can adapt his experience to solve a problem effectively than his college. In fact, Havard Business Review published an research that found more than 90% of C-level management had changed careers at least two times. People who change their job
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 gain several advantages. The most important is they learn how to learn new thing which is a critical skill for
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 century. In sum, I am of the opinion that the pros of changing an organisation
outweighs
Suggestion
outweigh
 the cons of remaining in the same company.

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