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With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the Internet. What potential problems may this trend lead to? What solutions can you suggest to deal with it?

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Social media has taken over the entire world, with even the remotest area having an
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 and social networking. But its advancement has resulted in teenagers being granted greater
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 which can lead to potentially harmful consequences.
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, the
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 and social media is inevitable in today’s technical world. Restricting youngsters from using the web is neither possible nor ethically correct; rather they should be encouraged to do so in a responsible manner. They should be given counselling and advice on the correct and incorrect
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 be made aware of the dangerous situations which, its wrong
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 can land them in. For an illustration children refrained from visiting certain websites just because they were advised not to do so by their parents or teachers.
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, using counselling to create awareness among the younger generation can be one possible solution to the problem at hand.
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, certain content on the net is quite inappropriate for the younger generation to
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, even accidentally, in that case parents can take help of certain softwares which restrict the teenagers from viewing the content not meant for their age group. For reference, Netflix uses one
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 software which shows media options only according to the age limit, set in the viewer’s profile; and the profile can be locked with a password.
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, showing the possibility that technology can aid to mitigate some of the adverse effects of technology itself. To conclude,
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 of technology can help us to stand against the potential risks, that the unlimited
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 of the web, given to teenagers, can result in.
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