Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays social media are something so common to everyone from a child of 3 years old to a woman of 90 years old. They have become necessary the contemporary globalized society in which people have the need to feel always in contact with the others and to have the possibility to be always informed about what they want. Anyway, as all the things in

this

world

, social media can be either useful or dangerous. Considering the advantages of social media in our

society it

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society, it

is clear that, as I

told

being the one previously mentioned or spoken of

said

before, they can give to anyone the chance of discovering new things, confirm something about we were doubtful or destroy some belief or prejudices.

Moreover

, social media can let people communicate at every time of the day in every single in the

world

and that it is considerable because people, in that way, cannot feel lonely and can feel always safe.

Also

medias

a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information

media

as Skype or FaceTime can help

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with

new

world

jobs. It is impossible to forget that social

such

as Instagram, Twitter and Facebook are fundamental to share the importance of being open-minded in a

world

made by different cultures. On the other side, social media present some disadvantages too. When a person goes through the information written by someone else in a social media be very dangerous because there is no guarantee that

this

news is

true so that,

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true, so that

a person could be influenced by something wrong and share false reports. Social media in fact

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are

a jungle of information that are not controlled.

Also

, social media are

instrument

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instruments

an instrument

used for bullying

people especially

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people, especially

talking about teenagers and that it is a theme that it is not

discuss

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discussed

properly and rather it should be an argument that people must take more seriously. Summarizing, in my opinion, social media has both positive and negative

aspects but

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aspects, but

is necessary consider

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considers necessary

is necessary consider

the type of society in which we are living, namely a globalized one, so instruments, as social media are essential to survive and to be not odds

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with

the community.

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