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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays social media are something so common to everyone from a child of 3 years old to a woman of 90 years old. They have become necessary the contemporary globalized society in which people have the need to feel always in contact with the others and to have the possibility to be always informed about what they want. Anyway, as all the things in
this
world
, social media can be either useful or dangerous. Considering the advantages of social media in our
society it
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society, it
 is clear that, as I
told
being the one previously mentioned or spoken of
said
 before, they can give to anyone the chance of discovering new things, confirm something about we were doubtful or destroy some belief or prejudices.
Moreover
, social media can let people communicate at every time of the day in every single in the
world
 and that it is considerable because people, in that way, cannot feel lonely and can feel always safe.
Also
,
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 as Skype or FaceTime can help
in
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with
 new
world
 jobs. It is impossible to forget that social
such
 as Instagram, Twitter and Facebook are fundamental to share the importance of being open-minded in a
world
 made by different cultures. On the other side, social media present some disadvantages too. When a person goes through the information written by someone else in a social media be very dangerous because there is no guarantee that
this
 news is
true so that,
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true, so that
 a person could be influenced by something wrong and share false reports. Social media in fact
is
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are
 a jungle of information that are not controlled.
Also
, social media are
instrument
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instruments
an instrument
 used for bullying
people especially
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people, especially
 talking about teenagers and that it is a theme that it is not
discuss
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discussed
 properly and rather it should be an argument that people must take more seriously. Summarizing, in my opinion, social media has both positive and negative
aspects but
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aspects, but
 it
is necessary consider
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considers necessary
is necessary consider
 the type of society in which we are living, namely a globalized one, so instruments, as social media are essential to survive and to be not odds
in
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with
 the community.
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