A local school is requesting ideas for renovations. Write to them and include Problems they have now Suggestions to change How they could make these changes
Dear Sir,
We
so glad to know that the institute is going through renovation. Earlier, Add a verb
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I wanted to raise certain concerns regarding institutional infrastructure, from the kid's perspective,
but did not get a chance. But Remove the comma
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finally
, the management has decided to take this
initiative and I am so thrilled to put forward my suggestions.
There are certain problems which as following. Firstly
, the location of the academy is not good. The road on which the academy is located is not safe and there are so many holes. So many accidents have taken place in the past. Secondly
, there are very limited books
in the library, due which
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to which
students
lack study material relevant to their subjects. For example
, sometimes certain topics are explained better by other authors rather than the recommended in the syllabus. Thirdly
, sports
ground is not up to the mark because of which children indulge less
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fewer
sports
activities. Sports
is quite significant to a certain extent, in student's
overall development. Fourthly, they aren't any seating arrangement in the cafeteria, Mostly, either they have to eat while standing or need to sit ground, which is quite inconvenient.
But these things issues can be resolved by Fix the agreement mistake
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First
and for most
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foremost
by
repairing the roads and by adding required speed brakes, can easily reduce accidents. Change preposition
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Secondly
, the institution needs to increase books
in the library, so that children don't fall short of books
during their exams. Different author books
should be available,
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students
can understand difficult concepts in depth. Thirdly
, sports
ground and playground need to be separate. More swings and well structured
basketball, tennis and badminton courts are required. Children cannot compete in interschool competitions, since they lack Add a hyphen
well-structured
right
environment and practice. Fourthly, Correct article usage
the right
students
need proper
seating arrangement in the cafeteria, so that they can comfortably finish their lunch. Either they spill food or don't eat food, they could hamper their health.
The above suggestions can be implemented through external help. A petition mentioning all the issues related to roads, Correct article usage
a proper
further
signed by all the guardians needs to be submitted to the city Mayor. This
will definitely have a very strong impact and they will definitely take some serious action. In case
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library
, the school administration needs to get in touch with local bookstores. We know that every institution has a budget constraint and buying new Add an article
the library
a library
books
can be very expensive. Instead
of new, you can purchase second hand
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second-hand
books
from these local book stores, since study material is important. This
will be very
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cost effective
approach and at Add a hyphen
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same
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Sports
is essential, since its related physical
growth. For constructing basketball, tennis and badminton court you will need extra manpower. So keeping Change preposition
to physical
mind
the budget and space, we as parents can help after school for 2 to 3 hours on a daily basis. Change preposition
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least, since the cafeteria is not very spacious so Correct article usage
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students
need to outside. Management can provide them with extra wooden benches. During lunch hour they can take them from the academy storage room and return them after the break.
I hope you will consider my rational ideas,
since institute good infrastructure affects student's mental and physical health. And we cannot compromise with their overall personality development, due to lack Remove the comma
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necessary
resources.
Yours faithfully,
ShreyaChange preposition
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