Being a celebrity-such as famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits. do you think that being celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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It is always difficult to be a famous personality.

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, it has some benefits

too

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too, such

such

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as luxurious

life

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style, renowned

name

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names

in the society, protection and various benefits along with deprived of their own personal

life

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due to stalking or work stress.

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, as a reputed celebrity they enjoy all the benefits, expensive valuables a common man can just think

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and are often recognized by the nation for the struggles and sacrifices they go through.

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, a footballer may enjoy valuable

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items, but

at the same time, it requires intense hard-work and dedication towards it.

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, they

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allow

for the easy entry to the VIP entries or are invited to big functions or parties. For relevance, a model youth icon may be under protection for 24 x 7 hours for their own safety and to keep anti-social elements away.

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, the person may be deprived to enjoy his/ her own personal or social

life

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or may sometimes experience loss of fear of

life

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and may remain under depression.

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, due to changing trends or interest, they might face hardship to maintain their status in the industry or may face stalking from their fans. To conclude,

life

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of celebrity or personality is not easy.

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, it is up to them to enjoy the moment they live every day.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

224 words

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