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Transport delays and long journey times are a widespread phenomenon in many cities today. What are the causes of this problem and how could the situation be improved?

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These days people are facing many issues with transportation
system
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 in almost all metropolitan cities and due to these problems people are very concerned. There are some main causes which will be discussed in the essay along with some solutions.
To begin
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 with, as per recent research by the
government
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, many citizens migrated from remote areas to inner cities, wherein lots of people use the already stretched network and congestion is inevitable.
As a result
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, it has become very tough to accommodate overcrowding in old developed
system
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.
Furthermore
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, probably the other main reason could be that the public
transport
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 in the main cities is unsatisfactory and very expensive. It does not cover all destinations, so people prefer private
transport
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 over the public.
For instance
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, as per the news in KhaleejTimes
last
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 week, 90% residences use the public
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 in Dubai because the
transport
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system
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 is advanced and covers every corner of the city in a minimal cost. Regarding potential solutions, the main remedy would be to increase taxes on four-wheelers and hike oil price so that people should avoid using private
transport
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 unnecessarily.
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, the
government
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 as well as the public, both are responsible equally to improve
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transport
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the transport system
transport systems
system
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. The
government
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 should strictly focus on our existing public transportation
system
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 and re-design it as we see in smart cities like Dubai, London and Singapore. Whereas, residences must encourage communal car-pooling
system
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 or use public
transport
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, whenever required. To sum up, overcrowding and increasing number of private vehicles, in outdated infrastructure,
are
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is
 one of the major reasons in transportation delays and long journeys. The
government
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 must act to these causes and improve the
system
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 very quickly.
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