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It is the responsibility of schools to teach children good behavior in addition to providing formal education.

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Responsibility most important thing for all students and they should learn the subject and have good
behaviour
 at
school
 or in educational places I believe that the family is the best place to teach
children
 good manners
as well as
 the education system can aid them.
Firstly
,
children
 could learn good
behaviour
 from family , especially their father and mother. When
children
 are
8or
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8 or
 9 months they will start learning
behaviour
as well
as
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and
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 if the
children
's
parents
 have
good
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 upbringing, the
children
 have the possibility of getting satisfactory sympathy.
For example
 ,
children
's brains or memory copy what their
parents
 do . If
parents
 have more responsibility for the family and what they do again young can optimize their brains. During the youngest grow up they should need an amazing and interesting
time
 for good manners. Their
parents
 help most importantly their
children
 and
then
 depend on the street conditions or how
school
behaviour
.
On the other hand
 , schools are
also
 forced to help.
Also
 helping teachers at
school
 is very important in Uzbekistan and many
parents
 say that
school
 is a second home for adults and the youngest. Because
school
 students spend most of their
time
 at
school
, from when they learn letters to when they step into big life, and
this
time
 is an important
time
 in a person's life,
that is
 why
school
also
 has its important for
children
 to be well-behaved. As if thier second family. In conclusion,
school
 and family are both important for a child's
behaviour
 and, most importantly, good
behaviour
.
However
,
parents
 responsibility more responsible than teachers
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coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of your essay, reinforcing the argument that both family and school play important roles in teaching good behavior.
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You have addressed the prompt fully, discussing the roles of both the family and the school in teaching children good behavior.

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