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Some people suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this

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There is no doubt that these days, working for a while after cycle 3 is a perfect way to get some practical skills. The question is it will affect young people to get a career for a few years before going to
university
 in their life? In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusion. In terms of advantages, on the
job
experience
 is one of the important requirements to secure good
work
. The main reason given to support
this
 appeal is that helps students obtain more know-how by learning better about the
work
 environment. To illustrate, many students in America have tried to find a
job
 before going to
university
 because help them to pay their education and get
experience
.
In other words
, they will have a big opportunity to be accepted in a company if they have the related
work
 practice
to
Suggestion
for
 the offered position
instead
 of those without training any
experience
.
However
, young people who take a
job
 for a few years before going to
university
 will face some problems in their life.
Firstly
, they probably forget the basic knowledge which had been taught in school.
Secondly
, they need to improve their important information in their major by completing their study at the
university
.
This
 is because
work
 could become a large distraction and chances of keeping working is far greater than to the continues their study at
university
. In conclusion,
although
 it is said, the academic incentive will decrease to complete their study at the
university
.
Work
experience
 is important to get a good
job
 after graduating
university
.
Therefore
, I believe that chance to
work
 between school and
university
 is very important because
this
 way will define me to the chosen major right for me.
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